Audience feedback

On first Draft

 

After asking people about my first story board idea I recieved mxed feedback.

 

Male 18: i like the way you have done each clip to build up tension and suspence. This will lead on to be a really good story line and will grab peoples attention. There is also use of guns and violence so it meets your target audience

 

Male 44: I think that when you show the man with the gun you should make it more tense by doing a close up of the man slowly moving down to the gun this can cause more suspence as us as the audience do not know what were waiting for. It makes the audience feel like the movie is going to be action packed which suits your target audience and will make them want to watch on.

 

Female 17 (media student) : I think your shots set the narrative clearly, and gives a clear idea on what the stroy line will be about. The violence and crime used fits your target audicene and your genre. Your shot types are creative and best for the shot its self. However i think with some shots you can compose them in a different way to make them more frightning and dramatic. I also think you should use some tracking movement in the part where he is getting taken away.



1st 

Story Board Draft

How technical codes are used:

Firstly editing is used, this is because there is no action in this part. The Production company is being presented in the first image, the words are going to fade in slowly, after 4 seconds it will then fade out. Next we see an establishing shot from a POV angle, this is showing the hectic busy town centre from Ronnies point of view. Next we have a close up of Ronnies eye, which then cuts to a eyeline match to the gun man. A mid shot of the gun man, the camera then pans around to face down at the town to show the gun mans POV. Editing is then used to fade out to a black screen as we hear a loud gun sound, I will do this by using an editing program on the computer i will be using to collaborate my film together. The camera fades back in from black slowly to show Ronnie hiding behind a wall looking relieved but confused, this is when his cast name is presented at the bottom of the screen 'Steve Offord', it slides in and slides back out . The camera cuts out instantly to blackness, the letters ESCAPE ROUTE appare on the screen one by one, i will do this using a a program on the computer. A mid shot then occurs with high key lighting showing Ronnie sitting on the sofa enjoying his life. Next there is a full body shot of the the blurred out door showing two men standing there banging on the door shouting. Over the shoulder shot then shows them charging in and walking towards Ronnie, this is fast pace editing to cause a more dramatic effect to the situation. We track them as the pull Ronnie up and arrest him and drag him out of the house whilst he was trying to wrestle them off. The camera cuts to a long shot of Ronnies Wife and child, at this shot at the bottom of the screen these characters names will slide it at the bottom. Whilst this is happeneing there will be a tense emotional sound track. Next we have a close up of Ronnies face in the car whilst it is driving away. Finally there is a close up shot of Ronnies eyes as he gasps and jumps up in surprise. The camera the pans across his wall showing news paper articles about the murder that he apparently he commited.

Full synopsis 

of my film idea

Ronnie clyde has had a difficult past, involved in violence, crime, and dealt with the toughest  gangster criminals going since a young age. However after finding the love of his life in a recovery camp both of their world's changed for the better. Both settles down in a lovely house with great jobs, and one young beautiful daughter. Despite having changed his life around, the police will always have it in for Clyde and will never let his criminal past go. 

It was a normal day Ronnie was walking through the town centre to buy his little girl a birthday present, it's the day that the prime minister makes an appearance in the town square to present a speech. Whilst Clyde is walking through the town he spots some irregular movement up on the malls roof top. He knows that something is about to happen.
He catches the gun mans eye, they glance deeply at each other, the gun man turns away. BANG. A shot has been fired, we don't know who at or why. Everyone instantly fell to the ground, apart from Clyde who managed to crawl his way through the crowd to find himself tightly attached to a wall just about being able to look round to see the gun men. They had gone from the balcony, completely disappeared. Ronnie had this mind all day thinking why and who, and how he recognized them. He finally got home, and relaxed with his family watching the news about what had happened in the town centre today, however it still never left his mind who he saw and how he knew them. 

He carried on sitting peacefully until a stampede of armed police men came crashing into their loving home causing floods of emotions to run through the family and their minds. screaming for Ronnie as the police drag him away from his family and arrest him with the murder of the Prime Minister in todays shooting. But how? But why?  His family left screaming in worry and concern, they knew it could not be true. 

He awoke with a sudden fright in his prison cell. it was all a flash back from when he got arrested. We see his cell wall full of newspaper articles of his arrest and the shooting. We then a piece of paper that shows an escape route to get out of prison. Ronnie knows he didn't do this and he will do anything and everything he can to get out and find the person that did. 

My Final Idea And Why

I have decided to choose my second synopsis idea for my final film. 

I have chosen this idea because of the type of story line, the idea of this film is for it to not be confusing and sophisticated, it is designed to be action packed and full of adventure and violence, ideal for men. Stereotypically woman are more engaged to typical woman power films involving a long sophisticated story line that doesn't involve much violence, this is what my other synopsis idea's included. However men are stereotypically presented to loose interest in confusing long story lines and are traditionally said to love violent, gory action films. 

In my research I found that men aged 15-40 are the usual target audience for my genre of film. Most of the films i researched within my genre had male main characters and not many female characters at all, therefore this matches my film idea with having majority male characters. Also in the films i researched i discovered that the films always had a typical energy chase involved, this interlinks with my idea about having a continuous war/chase and binary opposition between the good 'guy' and the bad 'guy'.