AUDIENCE FEEDBACK

 

ON SECOND DRAFT:

 

 

GEORGIA 17: I think this has improved from your first draft, and you have got some more creative ideas into your plot which will make your opening more interesting.

 

MEGAN 17: I think the montage idea will be really creative and help set a solid action code to help the auidence understand the problem within the narrative. However i think you could do something within the sequence to help suggest why Ronnie is going to prison to help make it extra clear for the audience.

 

ROB 23: I like the action and thrill throughout the shots it will emphasis the tension within the opening scene. The montage will make the film more atmospheric and realistic. I think you could also add a shot or perform an action code that will resemble the reason why this has all happened.

 



 

Second Draft

 

This is my final draft, I have adjusted it to fit the needs of all of my viewers and target audience. One of the main things I have changed is the middle of opening sequence. I have changed from a flowing camera shot to a montage of clips that represent an action code and give a clearer idea of what has happened. This will also show the audience a Ronnies memories. The montage will inclue clips from when the police turned up at Ronnie's house and when Ronnie got arrested in his own home, it will also show's Ronnie'ss child crying at the door, this will cause tension and emotion to flow within the audience. I am also going to add another scene at the end that is not currently in this draft, this will include Ronnie waking upwith a gasp in a prison bed, next there is a shot wall of his prison cell, showing news paper articles of the murder.

                                 
These images are the logo and production company title I am going to use at the beggining of my film openeing.' Major Meyer Productions' is going to be my production company that will be shown at the beggining. I created this Logo and Title usng Adobe Photoshop and Adobe Illustrator, I used different techniques to come up with each idea, this included reducing opacity, cutting out shapes, experimenting with different colours and changing fonts. This will help my production company be recognisable and be shown as proffesional. Using these in my film opening will create a realistic effect and help my film be seen as more realistic.