Second Draft

 

This is my final draft, I have adjusted it to fit the needs of all of my viewers and target audience. One of the main things I have changed is the middle of opening sequence. I have changed from a flowing camera shot to a montage of clips that represent an action code and give a clearer idea of what has happened. This will also show the audience a Ronnies memories. The montage will inclue clips from when the police turned up at Ronnie's house and when Ronnie got arrested in his own home, it will also show's Ronnie'ss child crying at the door, this will cause tension and emotion to flow within the audience. I am also going to add another scene at the end that is not currently in this draft, this will include Ronnie waking upwith a gasp in a prison bed, next there is a shot wall of his prison cell, showing news paper articles of the murder.